Tuesday, February 14, 2012

My Reflection on "Two Cities" and "I Would Rather Be Fat" - Persuasive Essay


The Use of Uniforms- Good or Bad?  

We have all felt the stress of dealing with what to wear on a free dress day at school.  The night before you go through your entire closet, picking out the perfect things to wear.  What if you had to live like this everyday?  Wouldn’t you get tired of it?  Uniforms have been present in religious and private schools, particularly in the United States, for generations and have even begun being used in public schools.  This subject is controversial; there are parents and their children who are strongly for it, as well as others who are strongly against it.  As of the 2007-2008 school year, 16.5% of all public schools in the United States used uniforms and 54% used a strict dress code.  My opinion is that the pros for the use of uniforms in public schools outweigh the cons. 

Those who are against uniforms will insist that they can’t express themselves if they aren’t wearing their own choice of clothes.  There is a bit of a lack of individuality because you are wearing the same clothes as your peers, but this can also be seen as a good thing.  As it turns out, however, there are other ways to express yourself than through your clothes.  My brother works in an underprivileged school in San Antonio, Texas where, due to the use of uniforms, the students use their hair to express themselves and show their individuality.  Hair is just one of the many ways to be unique and show who you are and what you believe in- without doing it through your own clothing.  These people who do not believe in uniforms also say that there is less personal freedom and that this is an undemocratic way of running a school.  These statements are indeed correct, but the pros defending the use of uniforms overpower these.  Uniforms are an egalitarian way of running a school and are not a distraction.  They also reduce stress, not only on the students who must decide on what to wear each day, but also to their parents who have to worry about the cost of buying the latest fashions for their children to wear to school.  The school also does not have to worry about a strict dress code, because everyone will be wearing school-approved clothing. 

There are social, economic, and emotional benefits to the use of uniforms in public schools.  Socially, uniforms create a more equal environment where the wealthier students don’t make those less affluent feel inferior.  There is less stress on students, parents, teachers, and school administration with the use of uniforms as well.  To all teachers and faculty members at public schools which don’t require uniforms, wouldn’t it be so much easier than having to continuously tell kids that they are not dressed appropriately?  And to all those public school students, not having to worry so much about how you look everyday would make your life so much easier!  As well as not having to worry as much, people could judge you by your personality and how you are as a human being rather than how you dress and how much you spend on clothing.  Who wouldn’t rather be judged by what they believe in and what they like and dislike, rather than how much they spent at the mall this weekend?  Emotionally they would be less self-conscious at school if they wore the same clothes as everyone else.  Feeling more equal to their peers, students would have more confidence in themselves, allowing them to have an overall better self-esteem, which is already very low for teenagers.  Finally, the economic benefits are appealing to both parents and their children.  Not having to buy as many clothes results in happier parents, and for those students who must pay for their own clothing, happier kids!  Saving money, improving one’s self-esteem, and being equal with one’s peers are just a few of the major benefits of being in a uniform school.  I think that if more public schools enacted this policy, everyone would be happier.  

To me, uniforms are a benefit to everyone in society.  So, would you rather attend a school that is more egalitarian, or go back to feeling self-conscious about your clothes and hoping that no one will know that your mother bought them for you at K-Mart?  The choice is yours.  

5 comments:

  1. I really liked how you hooked the reader at the beginning which effective rhetorical questions making the reader think a little bit about the topic before you start to give your opinion. You essay was very persuading and after reading it I have begun to believe that maybe wearing uniforms is much more time-efficient and less stressful. Good job! Very persuasive!

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  2. What a great essay! I found that it was really relatable as this type of subject is something that affects us as students. This is why I liked your hook, by starting off with something that most school students have experienced it pulled me in to see what your point of view was. Also the fact that you used a personal example but also as evidence of how people can express themselves without uniforms was creative and I really enjoyed reading it. Good job!

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  3. Good job! I was really impressed because you actually persuaded me by the end. My old school didn't have uniforms, and so I can personally relate and compare between this school and my last to decide, and at first I would have said no uniforms are better, like most people would probably initially say, but after reading this I had second thoughts. The hook was powerful, and you used humor throughout. I really enjoyed the privilege of reading this post!

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  4. I really liked this essay, particularly because it centers around a topic that we as students can easily relate to. For the past couple of years or so, I can recall myself having several conversations with friends of mine regarding whether we should have uniforms or not, so reading this essay was a very interesting experience seeing as how I was able to instantly relate. I also liked the reference of how some people change the style of their hair simply to stand out among a crowd that wears the same clothing. Overall an interesting read and effectively persuasive! Good job Olivia!

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  5. Your blog format is visually very appealing. Clean, clear, with a small picture and easy to read. Nice job.

    Your outline you turned in is very clearly written and well organized. Excellent job.

    Inclusive language makes your intro. effective! Nice line: "Who wouldn’t rather be judged by what they believe in and what they like and dislike, rather than how much they spent at the mall this weekend?"

    Some of your ideas were a bit overused, as in we've heard them before. How could you think even more outside the box, Olivia?

    Your essay is VERY polished and well organized. Very good work.

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